Poem Review?

[R. Chapman]

I have to type up a poem for Monday. It has to be about an abstract noun such as hope, sadness, horror etc. etc. here's what I have so far. I don't think it's all that great but then again I'm not poet writer.



Fear

Fear goes from a deep, dark red and to blue to a deafening black and white that turns into a deathly faze of hazy purple and grey.

It can be a 123 grain slug whizzing past you skull at an astonishing and blistering velocity of 2,600 FPS.

The sounds can be sudden and deafening, leaving you dazed with confusion and horror.

The stench of fear can be deathly and awakening, especially if your buddy just went down.

At one moment, it tastes like humidity and sunshine, the next it tastes like dirt, sweat, and gunfire.

The only touch you have with fear is the touch of a former soldier slung over your shoulder as your running like hell to safety.

[capt1972]

Well.....It doesn't rhyme.

[rebelp74]

Fag

[R. Chapman]

Well.....It doesn't rhyme.

She didn't want limericks for some reason, she wanted the poem to involve color, sight, sound, smell, taste, and touch. I think it sucks balls.

[R. Chapman]

Fag

Jarhead...

[rebelp74]

Fag

Jarhead...

I've never been in the military and am not worthy of title.

[R. Chapman]

Fag

Jarhead...

I've never been in the military and am not worthy of title.

Fair enough, I was just bored when I wrote this and came up with a pathetic excuse of a poem.

[rebelp74]

Fag

Jarhead...

I've never been in the military and am not worthy of title.

Fair enough, I was just bored when I wrote this and came up with a pathetic excuse of a poem.

Fag.

[R. Chapman]

Fag

Jarhead...

I've never been in the military and am not worthy of title.

Fair enough, I was just bored when I wrote this and came up with a pathetic excuse of a poem.

Fag.

Fuck face...

[rebelp74]

[assateague]

Well.....It doesn't rhyme.

She didn't want limericks for some reason, she wanted the poem to involve color, sight, sound, smell, taste, and touch. I think it sucks balls.

Roses are red and pokey,
Happy tastes like glue.
My poem looks like it rhymes,
And you stink. So fuck you.

[DeadEye_Dan]

I have to type up a poem for Monday. It has to be about an abstract noun such as hope, sadness, horror etc. etc. here's what I have so far. I don't think it's all that great but then again I'm not poet writer.



Fear

Fear. Never experienced it. Rex. Motherfucking. Chapman.


Bitch.

Fixed it.

[rebelp74]

Get with TK and have him haiku it for you

[Tomkat]

Teacher with perky tits
Horse and rider run for their lives
Later, smiles in poetry class

[(MT)Montanafowler]

Well.....It doesn't rhyme.

She didn't want limericks for some reason, she wanted the poem to involve color, sight, sound, smell, taste, and touch. I think it sucks balls.

Roses are red and pokey,
Happy tastes like glue.
My poem looks like it rhymes,
And you stink. So fuck you.

[gock5]

Winner winner, chicken dinner

[Flightstopper]

I have to type up a poem for Monday. It has to be about an abstract noun such as hope, sadness, horror etc. etc. here's what I have so far. I don't think it's all that great but then again I'm not poet writer.



Fear

Fear. Never experienced it. Rex. Motherfucking. Chapman.


Bitch.

Fixed it.

bahaha!

[R. Chapman]

Well.....It doesn't rhyme.

She didn't want limericks for some reason, she wanted the poem to involve color, sight, sound, smell, taste, and touch. I think it sucks balls.

Roses are red and pokey,
Happy tastes like glue.
My poem looks like it rhymes,
And you stink. So fuck you.

[aunt betty]

Hate is emotion.
It burns a hole in your gut.
Hate hatey haters

[Woody]

R, you found a way to make bullets gay.

[(MT)Montanafowler]

honestly, i'd refuse to do such a lame ass assignment.

[rebelp74]

honestly, i'd refuse to do such a lame ass assignment.

and then get up walk out huh

[The Duck Hammer]

honestly, i'd refuse to do such a lame ass assignment.

and then get up walk out huh

Vive la Chapman Revolution!

[RonE]

Hell Rex, I really and truly think it is a great poem. Your teacher will probably give you an A and make you read it in front of the class so be prepared.

[jehler]

Hell Rex, I really and truly think it is a great poem. Your teacher will probably give you an A and make you read it in front of the class so be prepared.

or send him to the counselor for mental evaluation 50/50

[(MT)Montanafowler]

honestly, i'd refuse to do such a lame ass assignment.

and then get up walk out huh

i'd only do that after i "EL KABONG!!" and hit the teacher with a guitar

[rebelp74]

honestly, i'd refuse to do such a lame ass assignment.

and then get up walk out huh

i'd only do that after i "EL KABONG!!" and hit the teacher with a guitar

You should change your avatar to quick draw mcgraw

[Feelin' Fowl]

Faze?

Is that French?

[R. Chapman]

Hell Rex, I really and truly think it is a great poem. Your teacher will probably give you an A and make you read it in front of the class so be prepared.

I don't care if I have to read the thing in front of everybody. Maybe it'll turn some kids idea around about going to war. Maybe this will show them how bad war is to a human. Or I'll look like an Emo kid.

[banknote]

It's got some good stuff going on, Rex, but I think you'd be better at writing a poem about something you've actually experienced. Seriously.